tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4151176949550076720.post8968736559140921289..comments2016-11-23T11:44:57.179+13:00Comments on Nathan @ Elm Park School: Camp MERCclassof2016http://www.blogger.com/profile/08905823353874584112noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4151176949550076720.post-77223841454124769362016-11-23T11:38:14.780+13:002016-11-23T11:38:14.780+13:00Good effort on improving your recount writing, Nat...Good effort on improving your recount writing, Nathan. You have tried to use a good hook and remembered to check your punctuation.Mrs Danehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16875067462688171942noreply@blogger.com